The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
The use of social
media
is replacing face
-to-face
interaction
among many people in society. The phrase contains advantages more than disadvantages that
will be illustrated below .
Reduced Correct pronoun usage
which
face
-to-face
interaction
among many people in society, because of the
social Correct article usage
apply
media
usage
. The disadvantage can be explained by an example that happened in my life .I have a friend who interacts me
every day and Change preposition
with me
update
me daily by using social Change the verb form
updates
media
. This
habit has become routine in our daily life
. After Fix the agreement mistake
lives
Add a comma
somedays,
somedays
he felt Correct your spelling
some days
a
eye irritation and he met a doctor , he informed him that his Change the article
an
eye sight
was damaged severely because of over Correct your spelling
eyesight
usage
of mobile
phone. Correct pronoun usage
his mobile
Then
we decided not to interact daily. so this
proves the face
to face
Correct your spelling
face-to-face
interaction
has been replaced by social media
.
The social
Correct article usage
Social
media
usage
is much better than wasting time on real time
Add a hyphen
real-time
meeting
.
The Fix the agreement mistake
meetings
face to
Add a hyphen
face-to-face
face
interaction
may cause time wastage . The social
Correct article usage
Social
media
can make a meeeting
between two Correct your spelling
meeting
person
without any cost .Any way Change to a plural noun
people
the
social Correct article usage
apply
media
usage
reduces the
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face-to-face
face
to face
interaction
it can be acceptable and it has advantage
more than Fix the agreement mistake
advantages
disadvantage
. If a person has Fix the agreement mistake
disadvantages
an
ability to work in a BPo company Change the article
the
that is
located in USA
by using online meeting applications, we can work from India itself. Correct article usage
the USA
This
will benifit
for the BPO company more than the person .
Correct your spelling
benefit
Finally
Add a comma
Finally,
i
concluded that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages . By comparing the advantages and disadvantages of social Change the capitalization
I
media
.
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task response
The essay addresses the topic and presents arguments for the advantages of social media replacing face-to-face interaction. However, the disadvantages are not thoroughly discussed. It would be beneficial to present a balanced view by acknowledging and discussing both advantages and disadvantages.
coherence cohesion
The essay has an introduction and a conclusion, but they could be more developed. The logical progression of ideas in the essay can be improved by providing clearer topic sentences and organizing the paragraphs more cohesively.
lexical resource
The essay demonstrates a reasonable range of vocabulary and includes some relevant terminology related to the topic. However, there is room for improvement in using more precise and varied vocabulary to enhance the clarity and effectiveness of the arguments.
grammatical range
The essay shows a satisfactory level of grammatical control with some errors. There is room for improvement in using a wider range of sentence structures, avoiding repetitive structures, and ensuring consistent verb tense usage.
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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