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It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advanatges of taking risks outweigh the disadvanatges ?

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 century has been marked as the epoch of human opportunities, especially when it comes to building a career and living your own
life
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. Some
people
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 tend to take a
risk
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whereas
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 for others it seems unconscious. There are certain benefits and drawbacks which will be discussed below. Living without taking
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risk
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risks
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 might be beneficial for some
people
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, even if they have
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to do so.
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 and stable
life
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 does not mean boring for
people
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 if they see any advantages of
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this
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 lifestyle. Building a career in one organisation, receiving all social benefits and planning a family
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 usually related to
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 without sudden movements and extreme activities. Not only
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people
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do people
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 try to avoid possible changes
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they
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 plan everything carefully in order to keep their
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life
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lives
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 calm.
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, without taking a
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 is difficult to realize your ambitions. Getting a new position abroad might give you a lucrative job in the future, which means there will be some changes to make. Adrenalin
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 of the things which push
people
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 to activate their dreams and plans.
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, some
people
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 participate
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extreeme
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extreme
sport
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 and
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 come up with the idea of setting up a new business.
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, sometimes
risk
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 is an
essantional
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essential
 in order to achieve your goals. I would like
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 by saying that, there has to be a balance between following a
lifestyly
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lifestyle
 with taking risks and
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being
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an undecisive
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undecisive
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indecisive
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 person.

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task response coherence
The introduction and conclusion are present but need improvement in clarity and relevance to the topic. Work on improving the logical structure of the essay to ensure better coherence and cohesion. Provide more relevant and specific examples to support your main points and enhance the clarity of ideas.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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