The map below show the changes that occurred to a town named Willington in 1780, 1860 and 2000.

The map below show the changes that occurred to a town named Willington in 1780, 1860 and 2000.
The map illustrates changes that occurred in the town of Willington in the years 1780, 1860, and 2000.
Overall
, it can be seen that the village became more residential and commercial including new
homes
, roads, a bridge,
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and shops
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shops
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and shops
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. villages, sports
field
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fields
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, and expanded areas for
wetland
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wetlands
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for birds.
In addition
, the
river
remained unchanged. Looking at the map in more detail, there were only 100
homes
in Willington and the west was occupied by farms in 1780. The
river
ran from north to south along the long side of the town, a feature that was unaltered by 2000. In the year 1860, some farms had been removed to give way to a road leading from the
river
to a village that had doubled in size (200
homes
) in the North.
Moreover
, there was
also
the appearance of a bridge over the
river
. In 2000, the number of
homes
had a
significantly
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rise, to 500
homes
and the farm and forest were completely destroyed. They were replaced by two schools, three
sport field
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sports fields
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and a lot of shops were constructed
in side
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inside
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the
river
. The final addition was a large lake
of
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south
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the south
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end of the
river
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • town
  • changes
  • occurred
  • 1780
  • 1860
  • 2000
  • map
  • show
  • named
  • Willington
  • introduction
  • overview
  • comparison
  • conclusion
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