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The table data below shows the top ten Internet users by country in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table data below shows the top ten Internet users by country in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table chart illustrates the top ten
internet
users
 by
country
 in 2016.
Overall
, it can be seen that China was the
country
 which has citizens access to the
Internet
 the most,
while
 people in Mexico
who
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did not
access
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have access
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 to
Internet
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the Internet
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.
In addition
, the
number of
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total
populations
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population
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 in India
were
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was
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also
highest
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the highest
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. Looking at the chart in more detail, the percentage of inhabitants in
UK
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the UK
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 accessing the
internet
 hit the highest point at 98,6%,
and
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followed by Japanese
accounted
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accounting for
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 91,1%.
US
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The US
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 became the third top
most
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country
 in
internet
 usage with 88,5% and the figure is
same
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the same
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to
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as
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 Germany with 88%. Opposite, India
just
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has just
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34,8
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34.8
%
people
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of people
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 using the
Internet
 with
total
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the total
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 population, which is the lowest in the given countries.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, Mexico is the second
last
country
having
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to have
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intere
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Internet
users
, 45,1% of its total population. Regarding the total
number
 of
Internet
Users
 in the countries, China was
the
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at the
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 top of the list with more than 720 million
internet
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Internet
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users
.
In contrast
, India is the
second highest
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second-highest
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number
 of
internet
users
, with more than 460
milion
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million
. Mexico had the least
number
 of
users
 in the given countries with just 58 million
internet
users
.
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