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Some people believe that car-free days are effective ways to reduce air pollution. However, others argue that there are other ways that are more effective. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Most people consider that the decline in weather pollution for a
day
 halts to
use
 of cars all over the world. Another part believes that there are many various methods to solve it. In my opinion, I believe that
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 using cars is not the most effective choice
while
 there are many ways to work out
this
 problem completely.
Firstly
, my essay will discuss how a
car-free
day
 affects the weather and our daily life
secondly
 it will discuss which way to help us more effectively. I think a
car-free
day
 is an impossible
day
 so we could not stop all cars everywhere. Because
this
day
 demands us to pause our life so nowadays we have to
use
 car and vehicle all
day
.
For example
 yes we set
this
day
 at the weekend when most schools and workplaces market and
also
while
 we could not require hospitals you do have not to
use
 an ambulance.
On the other hand
, people often claim that fixing air pollution in a lot of different ways. In my opinion, we should try to
use
 public transport to reduce the
use
 of plastic
petrol
 and increase investment in planting trees.
For instance
, I think two things most damage
petrol
 and
also
 destroy forests so if you decline to
use
 combustion engines which
petrol
 as fuel and plant new trees, I hope we could take a balance In conclusion, I believe that a
car-free
day
 is unnecessary
however
 reducing the
use
 of
petrol
 and planting are more benefits than a
car-free
day
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task response
Ensure that your essay clearly addresses all parts of the prompt. Make sure to discuss both views and provide your own opinion.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas logically and use cohesive devices to connect your sentences and paragraphs.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary and use more precise and appropriate words and phrases.
grammatical range
Pay attention to your sentence structure and sentence formation. Use a variety of sentence types and ensure grammatical accuracy.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • emissions standards
  • renewable energy
  • environmentally friendly
  • public transportation
  • pedestrian zones
  • commuter behavior
  • awareness
  • incentives
  • air pollution
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