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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it. Discuss in both views and give your opinion.

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Aircraft
 transportation plays a vital role in modern life. Many believe that it is very beneficial. On the flip side, some say it is unnecessary and extravagant. The present essay seeks to discuss the advantages of
aircraft
 transportation is emulate its disadvantages. The reason why people think they should use
aircraft
 to transport
fruits
 and
vegetables
because
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is because
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 it can bring an adequate intake of nutrition for the general population throughout the year. It's necessary for using
aircraft
, the distances will be shorter so that
fruits
 and
vegetables
 are kept fresh more. What's more, using
aircraft
 can bring more
fruits
 and
vegetables
 because it is a big transport. Take America as an example,
this
 is a big and developed country so they always use
aircraft
 to transport them to earn more profit.
On the other hand
, many people say perishable goods are not suitable for transporting.
Moreover
, some people think that in
aircraft
 there is a bad environment for
fruits
 and
vegetables
 to grow because of air and degree
while
 they can grow a variety of plants in trucks or ships. In conclusion, using
aircraft
 to deliver
fruits
 and
vegetables
 have a lot of benefits and negative effect
such
 as
plane's
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the plane's
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 environment but in the meantime,
aircraft
 transportation will continue to influence every aspect of our
every day
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 lives.

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task response
The essay does not fully address the task. It fails to discuss both views on the use of aircraft transportation for fruits and vegetables. The writer mainly focuses on the advantages and does not adequately present the opposing viewpoint.
coherence cohesion
The essay lacks coherence and cohesion. The ideas are not logically organized, and there is a lack of clear transitions between paragraphs and sentences.
lexical resource
The essay demonstrates limited lexical resource. There is a repetitive use of words and phrases, and the vocabulary choices are sometimes inappropriate or imprecise.
grammatical range
The essay shows a limited range of grammatical structures. There are several grammatical errors throughout the essay, including errors in verb tense, sentence structure, and agreement.

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