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Luck plays essential part in being successful/unsuccessful. Do you agree or disagree.

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Luck
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 may play a pivotal role when
people
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 are moving forward to a successful path or fortune destination. Sometimes, the same as children playing video games, winners perhaps rely on
luck
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 and will win the
last
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 victory. To some extent, I partially agree with that statement. On the
one
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 hand, I agree with the point that sometimes
luck
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 will give
people
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 chances against failure with an expedition. To illustrate,
one
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 day,
one
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 of my friends had an interview with more than forty job applicants, somewhat beyond his imagination.
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, the moment he came to the office to be interviewed, the earthquake occurred,
due to
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 his cleverness and awareness to remind the
people
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 on the spot to follow his steps to be safe. After that, the manager who interviewed him acclaimed him for the general and the response for handling the emergency. my lucky friend ended up getting the job unbelievably. It turns out that
luck
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 led him to pass the other job searchers without any comparison of skills or asking to be qualified, and he is the lasting winner in
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 event.
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, I truly believe sometimes
people
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 can achieve positive results because of
luck
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.
On the other hand
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, I disagree that
people
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 cannot pay attention to accomplishing their goals and do not dedicate their time to making it happen.
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,
one
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 of the geniuses in China when he was a little kid. His parents and relatives decided to not let him learn at school because of his diligence and cleverness compared to other children of the same age. Yet he later was not regarded as the smartest
one
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 anymore because he relied on natural gifts but no devotion to learning objects. He eventually became a normal child. Owing to
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 story, I am not content if
people
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 rely heavily on their smart brains
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 of dedicating their hearts and minds to access victory.
To conclude
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, winning or competing with some other competitors may depend on
luck
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, effort, and dedication.
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, it is hard to say that
luck
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 covers an area with a less amount of population and someone who takes most of his time and devotion will absolutely get the victory ticket.
People
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 should make an effort for the purpose of winning, but not just pray for
luck
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.

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