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Some of the people said that environmental pollutions because of country developing can notcannot be avoided.

#people #pollutions #country #notcannot
Nowadays with the advancement of technology, most
of
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countries
 are becoming more developed.
Although
this
 progress has many benefits, it has some negative side effects, too. Some
of
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people
said
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 that environmental
pollutions
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pollution
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 because of
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the country
a country
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country
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country's
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developing
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can notcannot
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cannot cannot
 be
avieded
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avoided
viewed
divided
. I partly agree with them,
however
, it is not
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 fact and some
countries
 have some efforts
in
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this
 issue. I agree with the
individualls
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individuals
 who
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 that
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environmental
pollutions
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pollution
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can notcannot
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cannot
 be avoided
due to
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country
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country's
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developing
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development
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.
In these
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 days,
countries
 and
cities
have a competition
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 to develop more than each other, and it
can notcannot
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cannot
 be
stooped
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 because of
fast
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the fast
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 speed of
technology
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improvemnt
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improvement
improvements
.
This
 high speed of developing development
have
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 (Subject-verb agreement) not only positive impacts, but
also
 negative effects. Some of these bad effects are air pollution,
bamper
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bumper
 to
bamper
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bumper
pamper
trafic
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traffic
 jam, water pollution, and many other things else. Most
of
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the
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countries
 do not pay
enogh
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enough
 attention to these problems
,
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 so that
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/their society can/could encounter these
isues
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issues
.
For example
, the more the
cities
 are developed, the more the population are (Not in agreement)
setteling
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settling
 there.
This
 huge population, need to transfer
trough
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 the (Generalization)
mega
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megacities
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cities
,
therefore
 lots of cars go to
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 for long hours and
this
 causes heavy traffics and air pollution.
In
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On the other side, I disagree with
this
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 idea
of
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that
human
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 cannot stop
the
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environmental
pollutions
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pollution
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 because of
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the city
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city
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developing
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development
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.
Firstly
, if governments
stablish
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establish
 some environmental
regullations
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regulations
,
many
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 of
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the pollutions
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pollutions
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pollution
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 can be stopped to improving improve.
For instance
, by some
rulls
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rules
 of not putting garbages into
rives
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rivers
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 and seas, the main water
pollutiant
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pollution
pollutant
pollutants
 can be diminished.
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in
inIn
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In
 conclusion,
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although
althogh
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although
countries
 and
cities
 are developing and it causes many air, water and other
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environmental
environmntal
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environmental
pollutions
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pollution
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,
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