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Millions of dollars are spent on research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

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 of millions of dollars
are
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paid for studying space every year,
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 some
people
belive
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 that
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money
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 to improve
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life on Earth is better.
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agree
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 with the first statement
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and
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 some reasons. First of all,
people
 need to spend money on space research to find another
phanet
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planet
 which
people
 can live in.The reason for
this
 is that the natural materials are being exhausted because of wasting it for a long time. It is true that most
of
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people
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activites
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activities
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 natural materials.
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, the majority of
cuontries
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countries
 in the world do not have enough
course
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 for
people
’s life.
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, the Earth is being polluted. The
reson
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reason
 is that
people
 use fossil fuel so much, which can
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make
 air pollution,
moreover
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a lot of factoríe burn garbage and make a lot of
cacbon
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carbon
 gas.
Due to
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global
 warming
is being increased
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, air pollution is being created, some countries
invest
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 and
improve
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space
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 industry. In conclusion, it is essential for countries to promote international trade and simultaneously enhance their own industries. Enhancing trading activities among countries som how hinders its stance on the international yet, authorities should do their best to control the growing
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 on importing in some cases.
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