compare two charts of house prices in 2013 and1995 at England

These charts give some information about the average price of
houses
between
years
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the years
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1995 and 2013 in
England
,
london
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London
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and 5 other regions of
England
.
OverallyOverall
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Overall
, it can be noticed that
houses
of
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in
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London
is
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are
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more expensive than
other
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in other
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residential parts of
England
in both years. In 1995 the average cost of
England
houses
was
near
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nearly
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60000
GB
although
this
number for
london
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London
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houses
was 90000
GB
and there was a
littele
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little
gap
betwwen
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between
them.
However
, in 2013 there is (Tense)
remarkable
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a remarkable
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gap between the house prices
of
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in
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London
and
England
. In 2013
the
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apply
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London
houses
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approximately
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were approximately
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as twice expensive as
England
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England's
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average residential
regions
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region
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which
means
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mean
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London
is
near
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nearly
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380000
GB
while
England
is 160000
GB
. For more details, the second bar chart helps to know
that
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apply
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the house
price
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prices
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of various parts of
England
incontrast
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in contrast
with
London
ion
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in
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2013. Midlands house prices
is
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are
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near 120000
GB
, North is 100000
GB
, South East is 220000, East is 175000, and
finally
South West is 165000. All these
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data
datas
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data
show
London
houses
is
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much more expensive than the other cities
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