Many people believe social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree/disagree?

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Social networking

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been widely used and followed by everyone

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professional. Social

media

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has become part of our everyday routine. where it is often argued that social

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usage

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has its positive

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in terms of increasing opportunities

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source of entertainment.

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I believe that both

individuals

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society are badly affected by the

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of social

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platforms.

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, the

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of social networking

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is a complete waste of time and

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, it has grabbed us badly in our everyday lives as

individuals

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use Facebook for countless hours without any purpose but the watching of videos and continuous scrolling has not only negatively shifted their focus from work/ studies but

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badly manipulated the society norms and values.

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it is evident that students waste 70% of their free time on

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of social

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sites

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instead

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of focusing on productive

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this

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, increasing

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of Facebook has led people to be involved in unethical and criminal

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such

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as robbery,

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of other belongings since these negative videos and

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are being watched by people which

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individuals

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to act the same in their life.

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, many young

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in Asian countries left their

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and started earning the

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livelihood

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through house robbery and street snatching. All in all, social networking

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immensely

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us since it is considered a waste of time and

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and

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increasing

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of social

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platforms will influence

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illegal

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Task Response

Your essay does not fully address the task. You should clearly state whether you agree, disagree, or have a balanced opinion on the impact of social networking sites. Your ideas should be more comprehensive and well-developed.

Coherence & Cohesion

There is some logical structure in your essay, but it could be improved. Try to organize your ideas more clearly and use appropriate transitions between paragraphs and sentences to improve the coherence and cohesion of your essay.

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There are some grammatical errors throughout your essay. Work on improving your sentence structure and grammar to enhance the clarity and effectiveness of your writing.

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Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

274 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

erosion
face-to-face
interactions
privacy concerns
data breaches
misinformation
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cyberbullying
online harassment
procrastination
productivity
social isolation
dissemination
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Fully explain your ideas

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