Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standard on earth. do you agree or this agre

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days,
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amount of money is used to discover
universe
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to explore something
out of
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the
earth
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that
human
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humans
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have never seen before . In the opposite view, people said that using
this
spending to develop their life facilities is more suitable . I agree with the first opinion and there are
example
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supporting my point On the
one
hand,
universe
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the universe
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is too massive for us to gain all of
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our knowledge
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about
this
, but nothing is impossible.
we have
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already
known
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that
one
day the
earth
will be destroyed and
one
work that we can do to prevent that bad circumstance
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from happening
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is
doing
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more research and gain more experience
for
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in
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this
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apply
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one
.
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, many countries all over the world go
for
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a race to invent
rocket
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rockets
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and
spaceship
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spaceships
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for their
cityzens
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citizens
against disasters like
earthquake
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earthquakes
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or
meteon
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meteor
mention
. For a long time, people
are
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have been
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unaware
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unware
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unaware
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to
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project
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the project
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environment
while
many warnings about destructive
earth
are given
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, children must be educated to have more
clear
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vision
about
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space
. When they
was
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young, it was very easy to teach them something and
that is
a suitable time for us to do that. Using more expenditure on universe education can bring
to
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young people effective wisdom helping them later.
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, in college or university, there is astronomy for pupils
interesting
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in
space
.After they
graduated
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, they can be
an
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space
engineer to improve their countries In conclusion , exploring
space
is very
compulusory
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compulsory
to
bring
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human
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humans
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out
of
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off
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this
planet.
In
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some day
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someday
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, the
earth
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Earth
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will be destroyed by something and knowledge about
space
will help us

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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