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The table below gives information about UK independent films. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about UK independent films. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates data about the independent films which were released in 2012 in Britain and
Republic
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 of Ireland. It can be seen from the table that dramas and documentaries took up the largest quantities, and both genres had the same number of
releases
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. Looking at the table for more details, dramas and documentaries accounted for 23.6% of the total
releases
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 in 2012.
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 was followed by the number of
releases
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 in comedies, horrors and thrillers. Biopics had the lowest number of
releases
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, which only accounted for 0.7% of all movies. In terms of
income
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 from ticket sales,
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 comedies were not released
the
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 most quantities of films, they were the highest proportion of
income
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, accounting for 45.4%. Horrors had the second largest proportion, which received about 20.2%.
Although
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biopic
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biopics
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 only released one film, its
income
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 exceeded dramas and documentaries’
income
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.
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, romance films achieved the lowest ratio of
income
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 from ticket sales.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words releases, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • independent films
  • box office revenue
  • film production
  • genre diversity
  • domestic market
  • international market
  • critical reception
  • trend analysis
  • market share
  • year-over-year comparison
  • growth trajectory
  • commercial success
  • film distribution
  • accolades and awards
  • viewer reception
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