The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.

The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.
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The graph below illustrates the median of everyday maximum and minimum mercury in degrees
celsius
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,
while
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the chart gives information about the average amount of
rainfall
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in 12 months for
Brisbane
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and
Canberra
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.
Overall
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, it clearly shows the highest temperature in
Brisbane
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occurs in February
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the
rainfall
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ratio,
as well as
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for the heat in
Canberra
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, it happened in February too,
while
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the
rainfall
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mostly came about between June and August.
To begin
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with, the beginning of the year can be said as the hottest weather in
Brisbane
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.
This
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can be looked at as in January the temperature started
with
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at
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28
celsius
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Celsius
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, touching 30
celsius
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Celsius
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in February. The
rainfall
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also
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dominates between January to March, almost 2 weeks of each month.
Canberra
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itself has
similarity
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similarities
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with
Brisbane
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in degree, yet the
rainfall
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is not frequent,
only
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with only
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7 - 8 days rain wetting
Canberra
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in the first quarter of the year. Starting winter, from May to August, the temperatures are at their lowest both in
Brisbane
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and
Canberra
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.
However
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, in
Canberra
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, rain often falls between June and August, about 10 days per month.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words rainfall, brisbane, canberra with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average daily maximum
  • average daily minimum
  • rainfall
  • degrees Celsius (°C)
  • anomalies
  • trends
  • geographic location
  • climate zones
  • seasonal changes
  • data representation
  • comparison
  • temperature range
  • weather patterns
  • statistical analysis
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