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the school can play a significant role in persons life. discuss about your opinion.

#school #role #persons #life
We spend more time in
school
 than
home
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at home
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. The teachers, friend,
environment
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and environment
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 the
school
 provides us plays a major role in our character
developmment
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development
. Especially the
school
 we go to for kindergarten and primary
school
. As someone who
have
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 been to 6 different schools throughout my lifetime, I can confidently say that it made a significant change to my character. I used to think that
I'm
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 not an academically gifted student, but that was because I
have
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had
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 been in the wrong
school
 all
this
 time. My
experiene
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experience
 of going to high
school
 in the United States for one
school
 year gave me a much wider perspective
in
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 life. All
this
 time I have been studying
school
 subjects by reading books and writing notes. Turns out there is a much better way of teaching like playing games and
haing
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having
 fun quizzes with a reward like candies or stickers. Little things like that really impacted my view on studying. Because of my experience in different
schools
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schools,
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 it made me realize how important what
school
 we go to is in our lives.
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