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The best way to solve the world’s environment problem is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#world’s #environment #price #fuel
It is indeed true that
fuel
 is
damadge
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damage
damaged
 our environment and
fuel
 use
increase
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 in
this
 era. In my opinion, I disagree with the given
staetment
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statement
 because
people
 can not stop
useing
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using
fuel
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss
about
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apply
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solve
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solving
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 the
world
's
environmet
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environment
environmental
problem
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problems
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. On the one side, some individuals believe that
increase
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increasing
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fule
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fuel
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price
 solve
oure
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our
 environmental problem which is
complitely
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completely
 wrong thinking.
Firstly
, The
world
have
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 no
altornative
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alternative
 solution instate of
fuel
.
Secondly
,
people
are use
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use
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fuel
every where
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everywhere
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such
 as electric
genarate
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generator
generate
, commute, long
distence
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distance
 travel (one
country
 to another
country
).
Moreover
,
Fuel
 is a strong
choise
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choice
 for every
country
 but
fuel
prodiuse
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produce
produces
produced
 air pollution which
is
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apply
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effect
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affects
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
 but we
don
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do not
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 have any option in
this
 era .
For example
,
fuel
is carry
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carries
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a
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the
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 power of
nation
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the nation
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 because
economy
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the economy
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 and
development
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development are
development were
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 fully dependent on
fuel
 in
this
modarn
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modern
 time. It is admittedly true some
people
considared
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considered
 that if
fuel
price
increase
then
 environmental pollution will
be solve
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 which not
convenion
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convention
convenient
 decision for a nation.
Howover
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However
, If a
country
their
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apply
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increase
fuel
price
 whice
is
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it
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effect
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affects
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 full
country
 because transport depend on
the
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apply
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fuel
. On the other side, when
transport
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the transport
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sectroe
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sector
section
secure
effect
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affected
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 by
fuel
whereas
 goods and
other necessary staff
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another necessary staff price
other necessary staff prices
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price
 will
be
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apply
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increase
 which
effecte
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affects
 normal
people
. A
seccussful
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successful
 example, In 2021 war
world
effect
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affected
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 by
fuel
 because Russia baned for bussiness which effeced that
countres
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countries
who are
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apply
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bought
fuel
 from Russia.
To sum up
,
people
 do not stop
uses
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using
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fuel
 until new
altornetiv
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alternative
introdiouse
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introduce
in
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into
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 the
world
. we have to save our environment
to
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in
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diffrent
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different
way
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ways
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such
 as
plant
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planting
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tree
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trees
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.
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