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Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on inproving living standard on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many people believe that the research on space every year should be spent millions of dollars, but
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others
inviduals
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believe
 that the
money
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for
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 improve living standards is more useful than
this
. In my opinion, I believe that use
money
 for both because when we invest
for
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 each thing, we will
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 various benefits. There are too many problems that need to be resolved. One of the
most
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 problems is global warming. So why
some
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 opinions suppose the
money
 should be spent on improving the quality of life
.
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 Global warming or transport facilities are one of the obvious increases in the poverty rate in the world.
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, each year many countries are destroyed by
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,
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or hurricane
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hurricane
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.
Therefore
money
 needs to be offset for them and rehabilitate back original.
On the other hand
, the world's population increasingly rising now on the planet.
Therefore
 scientists started highlighting the need to find new land, which is
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 for humans to live on the planet.
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, global warming has caused living
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worsed
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worse
 every year. The earth's ozone layer is
also
 in a state of being punctured, the sun will turn the earth into a meteorite one day. The government and scientists invest a lot of
money
 in space exploration to find a habitable planet similar to Earth and they will give people a new better life. In conclusion, I strongly agree with the statement that the government should
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money
 to discover universes. The government sees that situation, they can predict
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the future and they worry about the lives of their people so they use a lot of
money
 to invest in space.

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