The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
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The first line graph compares the amount of families with their electrical usage,
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the second one shows how much time each household per week doing housework over a
period
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of 99 years.
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, the usage of electrical devices from 1920 until 2019 had an increasing
trend
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,
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the total hours of housework during a week had a decreasing
trend
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until the end of the
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. As shown in the first line graph, the initiation percentage of using washing machines and vacuum cleaners was larger than that of refrigerators (40%, 30%, and 3% respectively).
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, their positions reversed and the percentage of using refrigerators and vacuum cleaners overtook that of washing machines.
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, the proportion of using refrigerators experienced a significant rise until 1980 and reached 100%.
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, it remained stable until the end of the
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,
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that of vacuum cleaners had an increasing
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until 2000 and remained static until 2019.
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, despite all fluctuations the percentage of using washing machines had a growing
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and reached 75% in 2019.
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the second line graph, the amount of housework hours experienced a dramatic decline from 1920 until 1960 and became 30% lower (20%). From 1960 to 2019 the hours fluctuated and reached about 10% (11%)
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of the
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words period, trend with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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