Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Is this a positive or negative development?
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changes
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in how
as a result
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. In my poin
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point
this
is because with technology
surrounding
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bring
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brings
to
miscommunication.
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with
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technology
that has affected how we build connection
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connections
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relationships
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coronavirus
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country
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their Change preposition
at
home
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homes
however
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my
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with my
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me
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people
. We both
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are both
also
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the person
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in
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them and Wrong verb form
meeting
found
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finding
this
affected
how we communicate with other Wrong verb form
affecting
people
and some of them leave negative development, I firmly believe with
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that
technology
could help us to get in touch with our relatives that live or study abroad. This
is because of the networking that has been spread all over the countries which make
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makes
people
easily to
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apply
to wait
. Change preposition
about waiting
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, when my dad study
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studied
at
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in
Europe
, he Correct word choice
and Europe
never
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was never
update
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updates
his
life every single day, so that my mom did not have Change preposition
on his
worry
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to worry
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not
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sent
with
each other and Change preposition
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should
wait approximately a week before a letter Verb problem
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besides
technology
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affecting
people
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have
positive
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a positive
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rights
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Ensure that all parts of the prompt are addressed in the essay. In this case, you did not discuss the positive or negative development of technology's impact on relationships.
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- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – Problems
- Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
- Conclusion
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- Another problem that needs to be considered...
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