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Some people believe that new technologies like mobiles kills social interaction . Do you agree or disagree ?

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There is an underlying assumption that in the contemporary era up-to-date devices, like smartphones can do harm to the social connection between
community
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.
However
, there are not only demerits in using modern gadgets
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 but
also
 some hidden benefits which I am going to explain
further
. First and foremost, it is a common misconception that cutting-edge smartphones only kill social bonds. It gives chances to
people
 interact from all over the globe. To exemplify, it is simply impossible for the dearest and nearest
people
 to keep in touch who have recently moved abroad for different purposes
such
 as studying, working or looking for another life. It seems that 100 years ago letters could not be delivered from Japan to South Africa
due to
 the lack of technological advances.
Moreover
, there are social media platforms
such
 as Facebook
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, Instagram and many others which may be helpful when someone has lost, it ought to be the fastest way to beg for help.
On the other hand
,there are some drawbacks which lead to many issues in socialising between
people
, especially in teenage groups. It seems that
people
 have been becoming couch potatoes day by day. They are only socialising through phone calls or surfing the Net. Unfortunately, it leads them not only to social problems in real life
due to
 the absence
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 contact
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but
also
 to health problems like obesity and high blood pressure. In conclusion, in the modern world, it is absolutely necessary to use state-of-the-art phones to socialise with each other.
On the contrary
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it needs to be balanced and no harm in social life would have been done.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face communication
  • instant messaging
  • social skills
  • nonverbal cues
  • distractions
  • notifications
  • social media
  • echo chambers
  • diverse perspectives
  • social connectivity
  • online communities
  • transcend
  • social integration
  • remote areas
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