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The pie chart and the table show the types of living accommodation occupied by 25-year-olds in London during the 1990s and 2010s, and the availability of different types of accommocation in London during the same two periods.

The pie chart and the table show the types of living accommodation occupied by 25-year-olds in London during the 1990s and 2010s, and the availability of different types of accommocation in London during the same two periods.
The pie chart and the figures illustrate the types of living accommodation occupied during the first 20 years in London between 1990 and 2010 and the availability of different types of accommodation there over periods of 20 years.
Overall
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, the proportion of
people
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 living with parents and a house (shared) is the largest. And, the proportion of
people
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 living in house (alone) and flat (alone) is the lowest.
Besides
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 that,
houses
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 and
flats
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 with 3-4 bedrooms still remain steady but 1-2 bedrooms
houses
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 and
flats
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 are significantly reduced. It can be seen from the pie chart that the number of
people
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 living in
flats
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 doubled between 1990 and 2010 and
houses
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 (shared)
also
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 rose but not too much.
Next,
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the number of
people
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 living with parents, in a house (alone) and flat (alone) fell by more than half. From the statistics, it can be inferred that 1-2 bedroom
houses
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 in 1990 decreased three times compared to 2010 from 34,000 to 12,000,
also
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 for 1-2 bedroom
flats
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 decreased from 32,000 to 10,000.
In addition
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, 3-4 4-bedroom
houses
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 remained stable from the 1990s to the 2010s without increasing from 47,000 to 48,500.
Finally
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, 3-4 bedroom
flats
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 in 2010 onwards reduced rapidly compared to the 1990s, by 7.000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 76%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, houses, flats with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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