Nowadays, people are spending more time away from their home because they spend longer in their workplace. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages?

In recent times, most
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the
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people
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to go out
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long working hours. By comparing
house
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and
outside
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place, it is evident that
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always remains a calm place for a working person. In my point of
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I would like to discuss both merits and demerits of the mentioned case. One of the major
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is people getting exposed to new
environment
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environments
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that they cannot
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in their
home
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.
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, during my weekends I love to go
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cafe
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and
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the beach
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, it relieves stress and mind
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