It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree / disagree with this opinion?

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A commonly held view is that teaching
children
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at an early age to identify right and wrong requires a certain level of
punishment
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to help them learn properly. I completely agree with
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opinion as
children
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will
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understand the
consequences
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of misbehaving.
However
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, the type of
punishment
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they should receive depends on the situation. Mostly,
children
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in their early ages did not fully grasp the aftermath of their actions having tantrums, throwing things or hitting friends. If we do not address
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violent
behavior
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properly, it can spiral out of control and even lead to serious
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. Teaching
children
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about the
consequences
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of their actions is essential, starting from a young age. There are two
type
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types
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of punishments, positive and negative. Some positive
punishment
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can be confronted with several benefits.
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, in school, teacher
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to give positive
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to their students
that
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did bad things
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as
late
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being late
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for school or bullying, by giving mild
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such
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as
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some reflections to reflect what
right
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is right
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or wrong.
On the other hand
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, parents at home give a
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system whenever the
children
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do something wrong or bad and ask nicely the reasons why they did it. In conclusion,
children
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should understand the
consequences
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of misbehaving
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the
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early age by giving
punishment
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based on the situation.
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positive
punishment
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can
benefits
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children
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to reflect
what
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on what
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they do.
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