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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart shows how urban residency has changed in four Asian countries from 1970 to 2040.
Overall
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it is clear that
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 urban living will increase in all countries, especially in Malaysia and the
Philippines
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. By 2040, Malaysia will have the highest percentage of people living in cities. In 1970, the
Philippines
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 and Malaysia had similar urban residency rates, around 31% and 30% respectively.
Thailand
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 and Indonesia had lower rates, with
Thailand
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 at 19% and Indonesia at 12%. Over the next 20 years, Malaysia’s rate went up and down, surpassing the
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 40% before rapidly increasing in 1990. It is projected to reach over 80% by 2040.
On the other hand
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, the
Philippines
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 saw a moderate decline after 1980 but is expected to recover and reach above 50% by 2040. Indonesia has seen significant growth in urban residency, surpassing
Thailand
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 in 2000 (28%) and the
Philippines
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 in 2010 (42%). It is projected to reach 55%, the second-highest among all countries.
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,
Thailand
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 has experienced a gradual increase and is currently around 30%. It is expected to rise to over 40% in the next 17 years.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words philippines, thailand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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