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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summeries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summeries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the
chatrs
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charts
chairs
 give information about the percentage of households
such
 as washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigeretor
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refrigerator
 and
vacuum
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vacuums
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with electrical appliances from 1920 to 2019
as well as
 show the number of hours
for
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apply
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per week ,
overall
 it can be seen that the amount of
house
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houses
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of
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apply
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chords with electrical
machin
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machine
rose dramatically .over the period
also
 the number of hours that people did their
houseworkes
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housework
decreased .
refards
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regards
 to the
amount
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number
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 of households that citizens
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who
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used
refigerators
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refrigerators
refrigerator
in 1920
by
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apply
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was around 2 percentage which
this
 amount reached from 2 to 100 per cent ,
that
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apply
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 was the same for using
vacuumes
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vacuums
vacuumed
vacuum
that
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apply
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there was
dramatic
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a dramatic
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 rise during the period between 1920 to 2019 .
however
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however,
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 washing machines in 1920 saw
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an
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increase sharply but in 1960
this
 per cent
fall
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fell
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steadly
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steadily
which
followed
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was followed
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 by jumped to about 70
percentage
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per cent
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. refers to levels of working
in
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apply
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per week ,stood at 50 hours even though
this
 time dropped quickly ,after following 5 years
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Ownership
  • Electrical appliances
  • Households
  • Decrease
  • Increase
  • Correlation
  • Period
  • Adoption
  • Universal
  • Minimal
  • Significant
  • Early years
  • Mid-century
  • Modern era
  • Data trends
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