The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summeries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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the

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charts

chairs

give information about the percentage of households

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as washing

machine

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machines

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refrigeretor

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refrigerator

and

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with electrical appliances from 1920 to 2019

as well as

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show the number of hours

for

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per week ,

overall

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it can be seen that the amount of

house

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houses

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chords with electrical

machin

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machine

rose dramatically .over the period

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the number of hours that people did their

houseworkes

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housework

decreased .

refards

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regards

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amount

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of households that citizens

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who

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used

refigerators

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refrigerators

refrigerator

in 1920

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was around 2 percentage which

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amount reached from 2 to 100 per cent ,

that

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was the same for using

vacuumes

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vacuums

vacuumed

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that

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there was

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rise during the period between 1920 to 2019 .

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however

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washing machines in 1920 saw

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increase sharply but in 1960

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per cent

fall

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steadly

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steadily

which

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by jumped to about 70

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per week ,stood at 50 hours even though

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time dropped quickly ,after following 5 years

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

161 words

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