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Many elderly people are no longer being looked after by their families, rather they are living in nursing homes. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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An increasing number of senior citizens in today’s society are not being taken
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 of by their immediate family;
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, they are residing in
care
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 establishments.
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 essay will analyze the positive and negative aspects of
this
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 trend. On a positive note, elderly
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 physical and mental well-being are carefully monitored and evaluated by trained professionals in residential
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. Scientific research clearly identifies that most people over the age of 60 suffer from potentially serious health issues
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 as cardiovascular diseases.
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 facilities,
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, have suitably qualified medical personnel and equipment to meet these challenges.
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, from a psychological perspective, residents’ mental health is stimulated through living in a community where there is potential for positive camaraderie with like-minded individuals.
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, there are several drawbacks to elderly people living in nursing
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 that affect both themselves and their family members.
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, being apart from their immediate family, on a daily basis, can result in unpleasant emotions
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 as feelings of isolation and being undervalued as a family member. The expense of
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homes
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,
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, can impose a serious financial burden on the family. In my country,
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, a
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 stay usually costs 3000 dollars with other charges excluded.
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, the majority of people on low incomes usually have no choice but to take
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 of elderly family members by themselves. In conclusion,
homes
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 for the aged provide geriatric patients with professional medical services that potentially prolong their lives. The challenges,
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, include feelings of abandonment amongst residents
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 the unmanageable financial costs to their families.

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