It is generally believed that some people are born with certains talents, for instance for sports or music, and other are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musicians. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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or
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where significant
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need a strong motive. Some
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people
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with
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certain
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that anyone can learn and
also
will be
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expert
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that specific field. In my opinion, I believe all
people
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equal
in the world
whereas
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any specific power or
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in by born. On the one hand, It is admittedly true that few
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are very passionate about some specific field where
people
think they are by born talent.
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,
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said that all
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equal
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but
people
can not
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to
brain
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Albert
Ainstain (
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physician
) used
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fact is every
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of brind
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on
people
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peronality
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personality
personally
, environment, friends and family.
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, some
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that
people
can learn any things from
any where
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and
also
they will be
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their field. I
compleatly
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completely
agree with
this
statement.
Human
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can learn from others which is natural. A child have any
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knowledge
about the world and they are not
talents
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born.
For example
, Bangladeshi most
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popular
news organization the Prothom Alo
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recently
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published
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about
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brain
. The
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said
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,
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brain
are
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is
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too much powerful
where
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and
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people
can
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adapt
any things form
people
or
others
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sources. For a successful example, Elon Mask
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rocket science from
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which is not a big deal
for
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in
this
era.
To sum up
, By born
talents
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a
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wrong thinking about
individuals
because anyone able to talent
,
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if they are
sriouse
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serious
seriously
about something
want
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to learn.
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