Some peole believe that culture will be ruined if it is used to earn tourism revenue, but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting culture. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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from
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will cause
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out
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some
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others believe it is the only way to keep the
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.
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essay argues that
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visitors may
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some impact
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culture
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, their spending during
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the
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keep
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alive and
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.
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can have a big contribution to the
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economy
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, people would
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customize
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in order to favour the travellers.
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, some people
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this
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would cause the death of a
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.
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, the Great Wall in China, which was an
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mailiary
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military
location in the past,
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a lot of retail stores nowadays for
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saviour
selling.
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Tourists
and travel agencies may consider
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place as a shopping area rather than a place of
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sightseeing
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.
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may be treated as a
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ruin
of the
culture
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.
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, it is not an easy task to protect the
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, money usually is an
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concern.
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, developing
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, on
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hand,
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the
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to the public,
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, keeping the
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source
of income for spending, like maintenance. Taking reference to the Forbidden
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of China, it generates
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of profit
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profit
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profits
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every year from foreign visitors,
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, the Forbidden
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can remain
at
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a
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good condition for its buildings. The Forbidden
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also
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continuous
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enrich their tourist experience
under
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the support of
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tourisum
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tourism
income, including the travelling guide or virtual visual
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experience
, to
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attract
more people to come. All these
tourism
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activities are not killing the
culture
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of Forbidden
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but
expending
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expanding
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its
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culture
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life. To
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conclude
, whether
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tourism
causing
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a
culture
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die
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or not is not about
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what there
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is visiting but more
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is how to promote or even
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rehabilitating
the
culture
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to keep its energy and unique value.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ruin
  • preserve
  • promote
  • financial support
  • exploitation
  • commodification
  • authenticity
  • balance
  • crucial
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