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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

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It is argued that
newspapers
 are losing their popularity and soon become a thing of the past
due to
 the Internet. In my opinion, the need for
information
 that was provided by
such
 media will not disappear itself, but it will change its form in the future. As technological development is really fast-paced, the need for curated physical
newspapers
 is decreasing. One of the main reasons is the increased awareness about the environmental impact of newspaper production. To think, that on a daily basis, enormous amounts of copies are delivered to people and
then
 read only once, which makes
this
 practice very unsustainable. It is scary how much wood is used in paper production annually.
Therefore
, many publisher houses have digitized their issues and encouraged readers to get online subscriptions. Another shift is related to the increased popularity of social media and user-generated content. Digital platforms enable to post real-life
information
 and generate open discussions, where people are able to express their opinions and find like-minded individuals.
Such
 practices were not possible previously.
Moreover
, current events in the world have made people more suspicious of opinions and
information
 written in official governmental
newspapers
,
thus
 creating more value in content created by private persons.
To conclude
, I agree with the statement that the internet will affect the usage of
newspapers
, which sooner or later will become a thing of the past.
However
, the need for
information
 about current issues will not change. Many traditional issues are digitized and the role of user-generated content as the provider of news will become more relevant and important.
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Task Response
Your essay addresses the topic and presents a clear viewpoint. However, try to provide a more explicit response to the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay has a clear and logical structure. Each paragraph discusses a specific point or reason. However, make sure to include a clear introduction that introduces the topic and your viewpoint, as well as a conclusion that summarizes your main points.
Lexical Resource
Your essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and appropriate use of academic words. Consider including more varied and complex sentence structures to further enhance your lexical resource.
Grammatical Range
Your essay shows a good command of grammar with minimal errors. However, try to incorporate more complex grammatical structures and sentence patterns to showcase a wider range of grammar.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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