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The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The illustration describes
about
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the production of milk in four
region
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regions
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.
This
 figure includes three years.
Overall
, every country except Australia has an upward trend from 1990 to 2010. Only in Australia was a downward tendency. During 1990-2000 years in
first
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the first
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 two countries
were
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apply
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decrease
Wrong verb form
decreased
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,
while
 in
second
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the second
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 two governments
were
Unnecessary verb
apply
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alone
increase
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increased
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. The
most
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biggest
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 increase was in Tanzania -- 55 000 litres and
most
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the most
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 falling was in Australia -- 141 000 litres.
However
, it did not show any changes in the table place.
due to
 the fact the difference of countries is
consequently
 huge:
while
 the first two types are more 10
millions
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million
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, the others are about only less than 100 hundred. If it comes to
Change the article
the year
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year
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years
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 2000 and 2010 years, to the list of rising countries
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 was added with 311 000 litres. The smallest number
were
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was
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 in Guatemala with only eighty-four hundred amounts.
Also
,
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 kept
own
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its own
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 place with merely less than 11. 5 million.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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