The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012

The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of employees of two genders in seven different departments at a university.
Overall
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it is clear that
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male workers are more than half of all genres of faculty, and the most noticeable data that can be viewed is on engineering, which peaks at 82%. Looking at the diagram more closely, one can see that the arts and education fields are dominated by female staff. There are around 15% more in the arts,
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there are three times more in education.
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, in business, law, and science departments, the proportion of male workers is higher than that of female workers.
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, males are almost two times higher than females in business and approximately 20% more in both law and science fields.
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, the employee percentage in engineering faculty has the most significant margin,
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there is nearly no difference in medicine faculty.
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