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The table below shows the world's ten most expensive countries for petrol along with other financial information.

The table below shows the world's ten most expensive countries for petrol along with other financial information.
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The table depicts the
countries
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 where
petrol
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 is
more
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most
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 expensive in the World. It
also
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 provides additional financial
informations
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information
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such
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 as the GDP per capita and average
income
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 in these
countries
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.
Overall
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, it is shown that not in every country the price of gasoline is balanced with one's
income
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.
However
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, the Average Monthly
Petrol
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 Expenditure is more or less the same
on
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in
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 the nations under consideration. In
countries
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such
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 as Norway or Belgium where monthly incomes are higher (respectively around 4329$ and 3125$), the percentage of that
income
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 spent on gasoline is quite low; 7,40% in Norway and 8,70% in Belgium. We cannot say the same for poorer
countries
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,
for
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instance
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 Eritrea where 61.10% of
a
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the
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 monthly salary is spent on
petrol
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. 122 At the same time, it seems like the average disposable
income
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 does not affect the monthly
petrol
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 expenditure because it remains pretty equal even in poorer
countries
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.
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, Norway spends around 319$ and Turkey (with a 924.64$ GDP) uses around the same amount, more specifically 315$.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "for instance, such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, petrol, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • petrol
  • expensive
  • countries
  • financial information
  • average
  • prices
  • GDP per capita
  • income
  • data
  • currency
  • fluctuate
  • factors
  • impact
  • cost of living
  • transportation
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