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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The given map illustrates the development in
Chorleywood
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village
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 from 1868 until 1994.
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, it can be seen that the most predominant changes were done from 1970 to 1994 with the expansion of
Chorleywood
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 Park and Golf course. For starters,
Chorleywood
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 started as a single piece of land with a main road that crossed over the
village
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 in 1868.
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, in 1883 the land was expanded and the
Chorleywood
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 station was created in which over the following years (1909) a
railway
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 was added.
This
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railway
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 passed through the main road and the station from the east to the west side of the
village
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.
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, there was a bigger expansion in the south part of the town from 1922 and 1970, ending with a motorway on the north-west side of the
village
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.
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railway
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 united the main road and the
railway
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.
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, the ultimate changes were made in the
last
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 decade of the 19th century.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chorleywood, village, railway with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • development
  • population growth
  • expansion
  • residential areas
  • commercial areas
  • infrastructure
  • facilities
  • steady increase
  • gradual expansion
  • significant growth
  • emerging trends
  • urbanization
  • rural village
  • town planning
  • residential development
  • economic development
  • transportation network
  • community services
  • public facilities
  • amenities
  • demographic changes
  • land use
  • housing
  • businesses
  • education
  • healthcare
  • recreational areas
  • social implications
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