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The charts below shoe the changesin ownership of electrical appliances and amunt of time spent doiing housework in household in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting th main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below shoe the changesin ownership of electrical appliances and amunt of time spent doiing housework in household in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting th main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
chart
 shows the changes in ownership of electrical
applliancesand
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appliances and
 amount of time spent in
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a house
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house hold
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household
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 in 1920 and 219. The
chart
represent
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represents
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 the usage of washing machine, Refrigerator,
Vacuum
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and Vacuum
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 cleaner
in
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from
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 the
year
 of 1920 to 2019. And,
also
 it
represent
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represents
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 the
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hours of
hoursof
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hours of
 housework per
week
,
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per household
per-household
perhousehold
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per household
 in the
year
of
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apply
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1920 to 2019 The
chart
 shows Three different
line
graph
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graphs
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. Each
line
 graph
indicate
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indicates
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 the
percentage
 of
house hold
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household
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 and
it's
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its
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year
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the year
a year
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. From 1920 to 1960 the usage of
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the refreigerator
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refreigerator
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refrigerator
its
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apply
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dramatically increased
his
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the
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percentage
 of
household
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households
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 from Zero to 90 in the
year
of
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apply
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1920 to 1960. From 1960 to 1980 the
line
 shows it
slighty
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slightly
 down. After 1980 it reached
it's
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its
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 100
percentage
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per cent
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. The other
chart
line
 shows the
percentage
 of washing
machine
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machines
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. The
line
showsin
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shows in
shows
 1920 it
start
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started
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 with
fourty
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forty
percentage
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per cent
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 of
hosehold
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household
households
, after that the
line
 shows
it's
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its
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 high
and
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apply
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percentage
 and it is flow 75% in 2019.
Aonther
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Another
line
showsthe
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shows the
percentage
 of vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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.From the
year
 1920 -
2019
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2019,
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 The
line
 increased
dramticallyfrom
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dramatically from
 30% to 100
percentage
 of
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the hosehold
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hosehold
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household
households
. The final graph
showsthe
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shows the
 number of hours of housework per
week
, per
hosehold
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household
.
fFrom
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From
 1920 it shows50
hoursfor
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hours
 per
week
. It is dramatically reduced in the upcoming
year
. In 2019
tghe
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the
line
 shows 10
hoursfor
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hours
hours for
 per
week
, one household.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, year, week, line, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represent" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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