The bar charts illustrate the average years of schooling, scientists and technicians per 1000 people and also the participation levels in research and development in developing and industrialised countries during 1980 and 1990.

The bar charts illustrate the average years of schooling, scientists and technicians per 1000 people and also the participation levels in research and development in developing and industrialised countries during 1980 and 1990.
The three bar charts illustrate the average
years
of schooling, the number of
scientist
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scientists
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and technicians, and money spent on research and development between developing and industrialised
countries
in 10
years
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10-year
period
start
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from 1980. For the number of
years
for schooling, the developed spent approximately 8.5
hours
in 1980. Meanwhile, developing
countries
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only finished their school for
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an averagely
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averagely
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2.5
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of 2.5
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hours
. By 1990, the
hours
of studying have been increased
estimately
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estimated
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around two
hours
for industrialised
countries
.
while
on the other hand
, developing
countries
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countries'
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schooling
hours
just
increade
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increased
by 0.5
hours
. The
numbers
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of scientists and technicians in developing
countries
were
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far less than
developed
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in developed
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countries
. In 1980, the
expert
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number of experts
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in developing
countries
was just 10 people out of 100 and gradually increased until it
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reached around 15
until
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scientists. For the advanced
countries
, their experts have fast increased in the
years
where in 1980 It only
stareted
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started
with approximately around 40 people out of 100 and now they
has
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number
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a number
the number
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of
techinican
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technicians
which has past 10
person
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people
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per million. Money spent doing Research and development in 1980
were
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only $150 dollars and by 1990 it
have
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has
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been
increase
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increasing
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by 200 billion.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, countries, hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar charts
  • average
  • schooling
  • scientists
  • technicians
  • participation
  • research and development
  • developing countries
  • industrialized countries
  • 1980
  • 1990
  • comparison
  • trends
  • differences
  • education
  • research levels
  • potential reasons
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