The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.
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The pie charts give information about how much money was received and spent annually by children’s charities in the USA. In general, more than half of the revenue sources were food donations and the rest of them were from organizations and investments. Meanwhile, most of the expenditures went to the program services, whilst others were used for fundraising and management.
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with, there was 53,561,580 dollar of revenue sources, where donated nourishment was the highest donation for USA charity with 85.6% of total sources. After
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, contributions from the community accounted for 10.4%, making it approximately 70% lower than donated food.
Next,
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program income made up only 2.2% of donations, followed by other incomes at 0.4%,
while
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investment and government funds were only a tiny fraction with 0.2% per each from the number of received charities.
Subsequently
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, there was 53,224,896 dollar in expenditures. The highest one was program services which accounted for 95.8% of the expenses incurred. The next expense was fundraising with only 2.6%,
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management and general only used 1.6% of total expenditures.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • charity
  • non-profit organization
  • funds
  • revenue
  • donations
  • grants
  • fundraising
  • expenditure
  • allocations
  • administrative costs
  • program services
  • beneficiaries
  • financial year
  • breakdown
  • percentage
  • portion
  • sector
  • philanthropy
  • budgeting
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