Children of different ages and countries play computer games these days. Parents think these computer games have little educational value and have harmful effects on children. What is your opinion?
It is stated that parents are getting more concerned with their kids playing
computer
games
. Furthermore
, they argue that computer
games
only give a small benefit of knowledge and might hurt their children
. In my personal opinion, I completely agree with the statement given, I acknowledge that computer
games
did not bring too much benefit to the kids.
The lack of communication could also
be a bad example of the long term of using computer
games
. Because children
who spend too much time on computer
games
rely on their games
frequently, so when there is a social event, they tend to prioritize their games
. Besides
, children
could lose good eyesight if they spend their time mostly in front of computers because whenever their eyes feel tired, they won't
surrender easily, and their ambitions drive them towards negative effects, as they keep on playing without seeing time go by.
Back when I was younger, I had a friend who even had to seek a psychologist because they couldn't
leave their computer
even for school. My friend's hand was always shaking and she could not focus on the school task at all, so even if her body was at school, her mind was not there. I don't
want the new generation to face the same problem as what my friend had to face when we were younger, because the process is hard, and it is terrifying to feel that way.
However
, some people argue that computer
games
are entertaining for children
, it's also
possible to make friends there. Even, some people could make money by playing computer
games
and staying online. I mean, at first computer
games
are not that bad, but if the children
can't
change or are even too possessed by their games
, then
it'll be hard for their parents to communicate with their children
again.
In conclusion, computer
games
have good value as well, as we can make online friends, learn a new language, and even receive wages if we are good enough to be gamers. However
, the negative impacts are many, as the children
could have bad mental health and physical health.Submitted by zefanyagyu on
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Introduction
Ensure that the introduction sets a clear tone for the essay by clearly stating your opinion on the topic.
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Develop main points more fully with specific examples and more detailed explanations to strengthen your argument.
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Present a balanced view by discussing opposing perspectives and providing specific examples to show understanding of the topic.
Grammar
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