62.Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Disucuss both these views and give your own opinion
Some say that
publicity
is victorious at convincing people
to purchase products, while
others would argue that there are too many announcements
that people
do not pay attention to. This
essay would argue that although
sometimes advertisements are very interesting, people
are able to skip them.
On the one hand, there are many ways in which companies can upload announcements
. Nowadays, they will investigate the market and do all the necessary work to make sure about what the consumers are looking for, so they can make the perfect advertisement to catch consumers’ attention, therefore
, people
will be persuaded to buy the product. For example
, there are many furniture companies which will make the advertising not look like publicity
, but like a story, so people
will finish watching the video
, which causes
an increase in sales of their products. However
, I believe that the quantity of announcements
should be regulated, since if there are too many, then
, will cause negative effects.
On the other hand
, because of the increasing number of people
using social media, social media companies decided to add the possibility of uploading advertisements on their applications, causing most people
are watch many announcements
every day, this
publicity
blocks and stops individuals from what they were doing, and this
causes
anger to people
who are watching the video
. For instance
, watching a Youtube video
normally there are two or three 15 seconds announcements
and when the next video
is going to be played, there is another publicity
, people
in this
period of time, will not watch the advertisement, instead
, they may go for a cup of coffee and then
come back. I believe that this
is because of the excessive amount of advertising, which causes
people
to not want to watch any more.
In conclusion, although
advertising in the correct way can lead to higher sales of products, the large amount of announcements
that there are in people
’s daily lives, causes
them to stop watching them and not paying attention.Submitted by elenazheng1211 on
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