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In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are individuals who get huge salaries. Regarding
this
,
people
 are divided into two groups with different opinions. First one thinks that it benefits a
country
,
while
 the other one believes there must be a salary limit. On the one hand, making a certain income boundary is a good idea. Some
people
 indeed have salaries that exceed their needs. By creating the boundary we could ensure that no money remains unused by being in someone's bank account and use it to sponsor social initiatives and green innovations, to support single mothers and disabled or poor
people
. With the help of these resources not only equality and improvement of life could be achieved, but
also
 new citizens could be attracted to settle in the
country
.
On the other hand
,
people
 who make tons of money didn't get them out of nowhere. Most of them have done something that wouldn't exist without their efforts.
For instance
, they could spend their whole life inventing recyclable plastic bottles to protect our planet from pollution, put all their savings on the line to run a startup that helps us in our everyday routine or just work hard and provide services of
high quality
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, which is useful as well. Limiting their income means removing motivation for others to do the same. Hard work must be paid off.
Otherwise
, fewer technologies and fewer businesses will be created. That will lead to stagnation in scientific progress
,
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decrease
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a decrease
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 in amount of workplaces and taxes, which is not something a
country
 could benefit from.
To conclude
, I strongly believe that both points of view make sense.
However
, in my opinion, innovations and workplaces benefit the
country
 more and
therefore
 I don't think that a limit should exist.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • incentivize
  • discrepancy
  • inequality
  • social cohesion
  • equitable distribution
  • wealth concentration
  • talent retention
  • global competitiveness
  • social unrest
  • innovate
  • government intervention
  • salary cap
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