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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram provides data on the ratio of residents living in urban areas for
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia. The chart includes information for the time period between 1970 and 2020
as well as
 a prediction of the trend till the year 2040.
Overall
 the
percentage
 of people living in cities has experienced a huge rise between 1970 and 2020. The biggest
growth
 compared to the other three countries can be seen in Malaysia,
which
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whose
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percentage
 started at approximately 30 and ended up being bigger than 80.
Moreover
, in each of these four countries, there was
a
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apply
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constant
growth
 during
this
 period. The only country that hasn't experienced constant
growth
was
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is
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 the Philippines. Its
percentage
 fell from a bit less than 50 to circa 40 between 1990 and 2010.
However
,
after
this
, the numbers raised back to approximately 45
percent
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per cent
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.
According to
 predictions, the upward trend will continue in the next 10 years.
However
, in Thailand, the
percentage
 is expected to grow at a more rapid pace than in the other three countries. A much lower tempo of
growth
 was predicted for Malaysia.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, growth with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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