The chart shows the sales of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014

#sales #five #kinds #jam

The line graph illustrates the numbers request of five different

flavors

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of jam namely, Strawberry,Raspberry, Grape,Cherry,and Plum between 2009 and 2014.

Overall

, three kinds of flavour taste Grape, Raspberry and Fritz increased over the 6 years but Plum

,was

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steadily dropped to the lowest number in 2014

while

, Cherry

sales

number was unstable from 2009 to 2014.

Firstly

, a Strawberry star

with

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above 3 in 2009 to peak the highest

sales

per cent by seven thousand, moving to the second kind the Raspberry under 3

then

increased slightly to 5 and was stable to around 5 thousand to the

last

year 2014. Plam

sales

began with the same number as Raspberry

sales

but , regularly declined to reach zero there was no inquiry for Palm

jam

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Jam

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in 2014. The cherry aroma

was fluctuated

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fluctuated

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starting with close to two to around three in the

last

year 2014. Noticed Grape rose dramatically from above zero to more than five.

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