The chart shows the sales of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014
The line graph illustrates the numbers request of five different
flavors
of jam namely, Strawberry,Raspberry, Grape,Cherry,and Plum between 2009 and 2014.
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flavours
Overall
, three kinds of flavour taste Grape, Raspberry and Fritz increased over the 6 years but Plum ,was
steadily dropped to the lowest number in 2014 Verb problem
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while
, Cherry sales
number was unstable from 2009 to 2014.
Firstly
, a Strawberry star with
above 3 in 2009 to peak the highest Change preposition
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sales
per cent by seven thousand, moving to the second kind the Raspberry under 3 then
increased slightly to 5 and was stable to around 5 thousand to the last
year 2014.
Plam sales
began with the same number as Raspberry sales
but , regularly declined to reach zero there was no inquiry for Palm jam
in 2014.
The cherry aroma Capitalize word
Jam
was fluctuated
starting with close to two to around three in the Change to the active voice
fluctuated
has fluctuated
last
year 2014.
Noticed Grape rose dramatically from above zero to more than five.Submitted by rawan.13mm on
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