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The pie charts below show the number of native speakers of different languages in canada in 1996,2006,2016.

The pie charts below show the number of native speakers of different languages in canada in 1996,2006,2016.
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The provided pie charts
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 the information of the native
speakers
 of different languages in
Canada
 over three decades.The number of
english
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speakers
have
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 been the most in numbers.
Canada
 is
an
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 country which has many languages and
the
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most
speakers
 use
english
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 and
french
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French
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 to communicate.In 1996 the number of
english
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speakers
were
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 more than half of the
speakers
.The french was used only by
moderate
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 amount of
speakers
.The
english
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language
 was much familiar among the people of
Canada
. In the
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time
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 the number of people
speak
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french
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 has been decreasing gradually and the
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number of english
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english
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speakers
 has been decreasing.As the
non official
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language
speakers
 have been increasing but not much equivalent to the
english
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speakers
.The
non official
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number of non-official
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language
speakers
was
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also
 increased
in
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an
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 minimal amount in three decades. From the pie chart the information about the
speakers
 of
Canada
 we are able to infer that the
speakers
prefering
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prefer
 to adopt
to
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french.The
non official
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language
speakers
 have been increased.The
speakers
 in 2016 used
the
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non official
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 languages
than
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the
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french.But
also
 in
2016
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2016,
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the
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apply
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english
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is
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was
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 the
language
 which most of the
speakers
preffered
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preferred
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words speakers, canada, english, language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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