The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts give information about a museum plan in 1998 and after some
ubgrades
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upgrades
that were made in 2008.  Looking from an
overall
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perspective, over the span of 10 years, it can be seen that the garden and the cafe stayed untouched. What is more, the restaurant was added in 2008.
Accroding
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According
to the materials, it can be seen that the permanent exhibition room that
were
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located in the upper left corner was replaced with the restaurant in 1998. It is
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worth mentioning that in 1998 the temporary exhibition room was
in
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the bottom of the building, but
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, in 2008, it was next to the restaurant. The garden which was in the centre of the museum had been filled with the cafe sitting area and the fountains by 2008. As can be seen from the data, the
tickets
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entrance and the exit stayed in place, but the shop had been moved to the bottom right corner by 2008.
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, the bags and coats had become on the right of the store.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • rectangular shape
  • central garden area
  • symmetrically arranged
  • expanded galleries
  • visitor flow management
  • temporary exhibition space
  • permanent gallery
  • visitor facilities
  • customer service focus
  • dedicated children's area
  • expanded restroom facilities
  • museum gardens
  • unoccupied outdoor space
  • shift towards long-term exhibits
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