The number of overweight children in developed countries is increasing. Some people think that it is due to problems such as the growing number of fast food outlets. Others believed that parents are to blame for not looking after their children’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The increase in the number of overweight

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in developed countries brings people to

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phenomenon. Some may argue that the rising number of

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restaurants could be a cause,

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that it is a parent's job to take care of their

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's eating habits. Both of

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are correct but it is necessary to get more details, to understand the root of

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issue. 72 The availability and popularity of fast

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outlets

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them a convenient option. It is easy to blame a parent for a

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's obesity but factors

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as socioeconomic status and access to healthy

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options

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play a significant role. For many families, eating

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healthy

and fresh

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is not always

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possible

. Fast

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is cheap and quick,

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is why they are so popular. It should be a top priority for fast-

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chains to transform their menus by introducing nutritious foods and vegetables. 157 Of course, parents play a fundamental role in their

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's health and weight. Some parents may not prioritize healthy eating or may lack knowledge about nutrition,

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they must be educated on

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topic. Government policies and regulations can have a huge impact if focused

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on educating parents and making more accessible healthy meals for

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can be revolutionary.

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, with the advancements in technology,

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are spending more time indoors, sitting in front of screens and engaging in less physical activity.

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can lead to obesity and

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not be undervalued. In conclusion, the increase in overweight

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in developed countries is the result of various factors including the availability of fast

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, sedentary lifestyle, and parental influence. Addressing

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issue requires a holistic approach involving individuals, families, communities, and government intervention.