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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentages of citizens' purchasing and drinking habits of
coffee
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 and tea in five townships of Australia. The study was conducted over a period of four weeks.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the maximum percentage of people went to restaurants,
while
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 the minimum bought fresh
coffee
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 beans. People residing in Melbourne lead in terms of caffeine intake;
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, Adelaide residents consume the minimum amount of
coffee
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. In Melbourne, around 63% went to a café, followed by about 48% who bought
instant
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coffee
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, and approximately 42% of citizens bought fresh
coffee
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.
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, in the city of Hobart, the buying rate is around 63%, 54%, and 38% for cafes, ready-made
coffee
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 and fresh
coffee
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 respectively. In Sydney, even though customers
prefered
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preferred
 to get to the cafe (around 62%), they
also
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 purchased nearly equal percentages of
instant
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 and fresh
coffee
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 (approximately 46% and 44%, respectively).
On the other hand
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, among the lowest consumers of
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 drink, as in Brisbane, more than a half percentage of inhabitants went to cafes; the customers purchasing
instant
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coffee
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 was almost 53%. The number of citizens who bought fresh
coffee
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 was the lowest here (around 34%). In Adelaide, it can be observed that almost equal percentages of people bought
instant
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coffee
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 and went to cafes;
however
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, in
this
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 city,
instant
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coffee
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 buyers were slightly more than restaurant visitors, which was approximately 50% and 49%, respectively. The purchase rate of fresh
coffee
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 here is almost equal to Brisbane (34%).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, instant with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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