Tourism has become one of the leading source of revenue in many countries. Do the advantage of tourism outweight the disadvantage?

Over the decades, the society has undergone several
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in terms of
tourism
. It
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the nation to grow economically. Despite that, it is
also
a concern for environmental disruption.
Although
, in my perspective, it is advantageous to society. Yet the downside of it cannot be neglected. To commence with,
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tourism
plays an inevitable role in
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society and it has
mulitple
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multiple
benefits .
Firstly
, it has been proven extremely productive for the local people because they provide essential facilities to the
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,
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to more income for them in order to provide financial help to their family.
Moreover
,
tourism
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one of the
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behind generating more employment, which we can see in the different sectors
such
as restaurant managers,
tourist
guides and hotel managers.
Furthermore
,
tourist
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can
also
have
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of rare tribal
communites
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communities
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still exist and
tourist
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tourists
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would be able to learn about the traditional and cultural things , afterwards , domestic people might get some international
finanical
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financial
aid, which
assits
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assists
assist
them in terms of
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living standard.
On the other hand
,
tourism
has
also
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impact which cannot be denied.
firstly
,
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number of
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at
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any particular spot
,
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is the cause of
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rise in pollution, it can be either water , air or noise pollution and that will be harmful
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the environment and concern for the local community.
In addition
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,
tourism
might be
responisble
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responsible
to spread
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the
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contagious
disease
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due to
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outflow and inflow of
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tourists.
One-stand
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out example would be
Covid-19
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, in 2019 whole world was suffering from the pandemic just because of continuous travel of
tourist
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tourists
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and most of the people lost their lives during that period because lack of effective vaccinations and several
part
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of the country's still struggling
with
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that
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.
To conclude
,
tourism
is an indispensable source for the country to contribute
in
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their economy to make
further
development in other areas
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example : Education , Health and Sports.
Although
, It has a dark side which needs attention, the brighter side of
this
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to overlook.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • revenue
  • advantage
  • disadvantage
  • economic benefits
  • job creation
  • infrastructure development
  • cultural exchange
  • environmental impact
  • overcrowding
  • strain on resources
  • exploitation
  • local communities
  • cultural commodification
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