Tourism has become one of the leading source of revenue in many countries. Do the advantage of tourism outweight the disadvantage?
Over the decades, the society has undergone several outflow and inflow of
transition
in terms of Change to a plural noun
transitions
tourism
. It assist
the nation to grow economically. Despite that, it is Change the verb form
assists
also
a concern for environmental disruption. Although
, in my perspective, it is advantageous to society. Yet the downside of it cannot be neglected.
To commence with, toursim
plays an inevitable role in Correct your spelling
tourism
the
society and it has Correct article usage
apply
mulitple
benefits .Correct your spelling
multiple
Firstly
, it has been proven extremely productive for the local people because they provide essential facilities to the tourist
, Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
leads
to more income for them in order to provide financial help to their family. Wrong verb form
leading
Moreover
, tourism
also
one of the Add a missing verb
is also
reason
behind generating more employment, which we can see in the different sectors Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
such
as restaurant managers, tourist
guides and hotel managers. Furthermore
, tourist
can Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
also
have glimpse
of rare tribal Add an article
a glimpse
communites
, which Correct your spelling
communities
is
still exist and Unnecessary verb
apply
tourist
would be able to learn about the traditional and cultural things , afterwards , domestic people might get some international Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
finanical
aid, which Correct your spelling
financial
assits
them in terms of Correct your spelling
assists
assist
better
living standard.
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a better
On the other hand
, tourism
has also
negative
impact which cannot be denied. Correct article usage
a negative
firstly
, large
number of Change the article
a large
the large
tourist
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tourists
at
any particular spot Change preposition
in
,
is the cause of Remove the comma
apply
high
rise in pollution, it can be either water , air or noise pollution and that will be harmful Add an article
the high
a high
for
the environment and concern for the local community. Change the preposition
to
In addition
to
, Change preposition
apply
tourism
might be responisble
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responsible
to spread
Change preposition
for spreading
the
contagious Correct article usage
apply
disease
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diseases
due to
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the
the
tourists. Correct article usage
apply
One-stand
out example would be Correct your spelling
One
Covid-19
, in 2019 whole world was suffering from the pandemic just because of continuous travel of Correct your spelling
COVID-19
tourist
and most of the people lost their lives during that period because lack of effective vaccinations and several Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
part
of the country's still struggling Change to a plural noun
parts
with
Change preposition
apply
that
.
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apply
To conclude
, tourism
is an indispensable source for the country to contribute in
their economy to make Change preposition
to
further
development in other areas for
example : Education , Health and Sports. Add the comma(s)
, for
Although
, It has a dark side which needs attention, the brighter side of this
hard
to overlook.Add a missing verb
is hard
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task response
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grammatical range
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Your opinion
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