In many developing nations, the rush to become industrialized has created major problems with air and water quality. What are the problems that this has brought about and offer some solutions to these problems?
It is formally acknowledged that
,
in today's modern society industrialisation is a Remove the comma
apply
ubiqutous
process which Correct your spelling
ubiquitous
have
brought many environmental Change the verb form
has
problems
. It seems that pollution of water
and air are
the most severe Correct subject-verb agreement
is
problems
nowadays in Fix the agreement mistake
problem
the
third world Correct article usage
apply
countries
. In this
essay
I will outline some Add a comma
essay,
problems
as well as
possible solutions.
There is no shadow of doubt
that in the modern Add an article
a doubt
era
more and more factories have been built in Add a comma
era,
countries
with low economical
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economic
develompent
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development
due to
the
cheap Correct article usage
apply
labor
. To be more precise, many factories, which are producing many kinds of heavy Change the spelling
labour
metalls
, are being built in Central Asia. Correct your spelling
metals
In particular
such
works pollute not only the water
people drink but also
the air they breath
. In Replace the word
breathe
short
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the short
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term
terms
it leads to sharp growth in pneumonia and food poisoning Add a comma
terms,
along with
more dangerous diseases such
as cancer.
Having said that, there are several approaches which can give good chances to solve these problems
. Undoubtedly, to improve water
quality much more water
purified factories should have been built. What is more, one way to give fresh air without chemicals that
the cutting-edge filtration systems have to be bought. Add a missing verb
is that
Consequently
, if government
would provide the right policies to keep Add an article
the government
environment
in safety, these Add an article
the environment
problems
ought to be ommited
.
In conclusion, developed Correct your spelling
omitted
countries
should provide support and in some way help to control ecological
situation in the Add an article
the ecological
countries
where they are interfered. Literally, they have to take into consideration not only their personal interests but also
people who work and live in the third world.Submitted by roker123456 on
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