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Many of today’s most urgent problems can only be solved through international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#today’s #cooperation
The modern
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world
 facing urgent
problems
 which
needs
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 to be solved wisely. I
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completely
 agree that some of those
problems
needs
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an
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international cooperation to be
tackeled
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tackled
. Some of the issues that
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facing
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 our planet nowadays ,are not an issue for one
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country
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countries
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country
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,to solve
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it
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 all the
internatinal
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international
 communities
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needs
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 to be
invoved
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involved
 in the solution. For
instace
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instance
, if one country
tried
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 to reduce wasting materials to solve the environmental crisis ,
while
 other
countries
 are increasing environmental damage, the
out come
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 is not going to be satisfying. critical planet
problems
needs
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 to be solved in all
countries
 at the same time for
positive
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a positive
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 outcome.
Furthermore
, some poor
countries
 can not solve
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serious
problems
 without financial support from developed
countries
. during covid
for example
alot
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a lot
 of developing
countries
 had no
fund
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 to bring covid
vaccine
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vaccines
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 to stop the
virous
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virus
to spread
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from spreading
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. international cooperation helped poor people to get the vaccine and help their lives. without financial cooperation between
countries
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countries,
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 some
problems
 will affect poor communities. in conclusion,I strongly
a gree
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agree
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thet
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that
 international communities need to work to
geter
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get
 to help
poor
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the poor
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country
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countries
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,
also
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and also
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 to find
final
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a final
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 solution
for
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to
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 global
problems
 at the same time.
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