The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
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The first plan depicts the
road
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network accessibility to a city hospital in 2007,
while
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the second plan illustrates it in 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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not only the
road
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network efficiency improved
at the end
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of the study period but some new facilities were constructed around the hospital environment for the convenience of staff and referrals to the hospital. Transforming the crossroads at the two ends of the Hospital
road
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in 2007 into roundabouts in 2010 in order to alleviate traffic congestion was the most significant improvement in the communication network of that region.
In addition
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, the bus stops in the Hospital
road
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were removed and a novel bus station was established on the west side of the
road
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.
Furthermore
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,
instead
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of just one parking lot on the east side of the Hospital
road
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for both the staff and the public utilisation in 2007, another car park was constructed on the east side of the city Hospital for public use,
therefore
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the former one was dedicated to staff use exclusively.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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