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The first chart bellow shows how energy is used in average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first chart bellow shows how energy is used in average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
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The pie charts illustrate the proportions of
energy
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 used by households and
gas
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emissions
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 produced by greenhouses using the
energy
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.
Overall
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, Australian households utilise most of their
energy
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 both on heating and water heating which results in the biggest percentage of
gas
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emissions
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. Looking into details, almost half of heating is used by Australian households, which is the highest followed by water heating with a quarter.
However
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, the figure for water heating spends less
energy
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 than heating, it significantly contributes most of the greenhouse
emissions
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 at 32%,
while
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 heating causes only 15%.
In contrast
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, both lighting and cooling utilise the least
energy
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 which is used, just only 4% and 2% respectively. They
also
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 produce under ten of
gas
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emissions
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, with 8% for lighting and only 3% for cooling.
Nevertheless
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, the figure for other appliances even used just 15 %, but
then
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 it causes more than double
gas
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emissions
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, with 28%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, gas, emissions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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